Saturday, April 28, 2007

Autobiography-1-Draft Two

Seventeen years ago, an active and easygoing baby was born in Tainan city. It’s me, Yu-Jheng Shen. I am studying in National Tainan Commercial Vocation School. There are four people in my family. My father is a simple and assiduous person. My mother is very serious, but prudential. My older brother is a very clever person. He can teach me everything which I don’t understand. Now he studies in National Cheng Kung University. I am very lucky to grow up in a great family.

I like to play volleyball. I used to be a member in volleyball team. My classmates always made up a group to participate the inter-class volleyball games, and we won the champions in all the competitions. I think it’s because we are united. On the other hand, I am interested in math, so I usually discuss difficult problems with my classmates. Teaching is learning, so my math is very outstanding.

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Blogger gimliong said...

Seventeen years ago, an active and easygoing baby was born in Tainan city. It's me, Yu-Jheng Shen. I am studying in National Tainan Commercial Vocation School now. There are four people in my family. My father is a simple and assiduous person. My mother is very serious but prudential. My older brother is a very clever person. He teaches me everything which I don't understand. Now, he studies in National Cheng Kung University. I am very lucky to grow up in such a great family.

I like to play volleyball. I used to be a member in volleyball team. My classmates always participated in the inter-class volleyball games, and we won the champions in all the competitions. In my opinions, it's because we are united. On the other hand, I am interested in math, so I usually discuss difficult problems with my classmates. Teaching is learning, so my math is very outstanding.


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